Why Roses have Thorns

Hi Friends! Today I'm going to post a myth that I wrote. Myths are stories that are made up  that serve to explain the world view of  people. Just some quick things to keep in mind when reading this story; Allagi is the Greek word for Transformation, Agapi is the Greek word for love, and Poniros is the Greek word for sly.
     One beautiful evening the goddess Allagi  was in her palace thinking to herself. She looked down at the envelope in her hands. It was a wedding invitation. Hermes had sent it to her this morning. It wrote, "Come celebrate the marriage of Poniros and Agapi." Agapi was Allagi's older brother. Poniros was his girlfriend. Poniros was a mortal girl." I don't trust Poniros. She's mean and ungrateful," thought Allagi. walked back and forth on the marble tiles." I can change her into anything, I just don't want to waste by energy, " Allagi told herself. Though Allagi didn't want to admit it, not even to herself, she did n't want to crush her brother's love life. She was just the kind of person that didn't like to express her emotions. Allagi thoughts were suddenly interrupted by the tapping echoing off the castle walls. "Hello Ugly," screeched a sassy voice. "Poniros," growled Allagi, who turned around. Poniros was wearing a dress that came down to here knees. She was wearing high heels that glittered and sparkled. "Did you receive one of these," exclaimed Poniros while taking out an invitation for the wedding and waving it around as if it was a million bucks. "Yes and I wish I hand't," said Allagi. She grabbed both envelops and tossed them in the trash. "You don't deserve Agapi. I'm going to go talk him out of marring you right now," said Allagi's arm," don't do anything to get our brother killed," whispered Poniros. "My brother is immortal he cannot die unless he chooses to be mortal," Allagi's voice faded when she said this." He didn't, "exclaimed Allagi." Oh but he did," snapped Poniros. Allagi pulled away from Poniros and ran to the direction of her brother's palace. 
      "Brother how could you marry that terrible girl," questioned Allagi. "She is nice and romantic. You've never fallen in love so you wouldn't know love if you saw it," snapped Agapi. "I may not know love but I know evil, and that's exactly what that red head is. Brother just listen to me, "pleaded Allagi. "No, you don't care about my life you are selfish. You are no longer welcome here. Get out, "shouted Agapi. "Fine, I don't care if you marry Poniros," with that Allagi left, tears in her eyes. 
       Four days past and Allagi and Agapi, didn't sleep at all. Allagi went outside and stepped into the pond rolling up her pants so they wouldn't get wet. Allagi heard flapping. She turned around and saw Hermes. "I have a message," Hermes said," Go ahead say it, "said Allagi. "Allagi I'm really sorry but Agapi's dead. They found him lying down on the grass. His heart wasn't beating. I'm sorry," said Hermes. Right after that he flew off. 
      Poniros was not at all sad. "Oh well," she signed, "I can always get another man." Allagi was mad she turned Poniros into a hideous Ogre. But she knew her brother loved Poniros and wouldn't want this. She changed Poniros into a red rose but gave her thorns so no one would ever hold or protect her like Allagi's brother. 


The End

Comments

  1. Great job Lynne! There was a lot of detail included but not too much. You might want to check the last paragraph though and change it to "Allagi was so mad she could..." Other than that one small typo it is a great myth and you should be proud of yourself.

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  2. Very interesting myth. You did a great job writing this yourself. Maybe oneday you can write childrens books. :) There are just a few small typos that I saw.

    In the beginning "Myths are stories that are made up that serves to explain the world view of people" serves should be "serve" no "s" on the end.

    She's mean and ungrateful," thought Allagi. walked back and forth on the marble tiles." I can change her into anything, I just don't want to waste by energy, " The period after Allagi does not need to be there and "walked" should be "walking" since he is doing that task right then. Also "by" near the end should be "my"

    a dress that came down to here knees. "here" should be "her"

    "envelops" needs an "e" between the "p" and "s" to read "envelopes"

    right now," said Allagi's arm," don't do should be (right now," said Allagi. "Don't do..." ) because the why you have it sounds as though Allagi's arm is the one talking and you need to capitalize the D in don't since it is a new sentence.

    Allagi left, tears in her eyes. should be Allagi left with tears in her eyes.


    Great story Lynne. You just have some minor little typos. Also check your quotation markings and make sure if you place one at the beginning of a sentence you have one at the end. There are a couple places you have two quotes back to back and just have once quotation mark when you need two because you need one to end the previous sentence and one to start the second one.

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  3. Wow I never noticed so many mistakes. Thanks for reading my blog.

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