[9:26:57 AM] Adam Heasley: I like this. The things you might want to do as add the word all after her. You do not really need the word all in the third line if you do not want. and lastly you might want to change the word was to wiegh because the way it is now the word ton is describing the word was.
[9:26:57 AM] Adam Heasley: I like this. The things you might want to do as add the word all after her. You do not really need the word all in the third line if you do not want. and lastly you might want to change the word was to wiegh because the way it is now the word ton is describing the word was.
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